Poem about the summer
IT is summer you and play with your friends on the beach, you are ready to go surf, the sun is shining like a nice brite star, the water is sooo cold, it feels like ice but when you get in, it is just fun all day long,
You get some ice cream, and you sit on the sand, the ice cream is sooo big, you and your friends make a sandcastle, it is as big as me and my friends.
Noo it is time to go home, we had so much fun, can we please have one more dip in the sea, we get in the car and we go home.
By: Juan de Jager
nice poem Juan i like how you put some cool images of people surfing but next time maybe you could put some more figurative language.
ReplyDeleteHi Juan I really like your poem about summer it makes me want to go to the beach right now. I love the pictures and there is lots of descriptive language but maybe next time you can try and work on your grammar a bit more but other than that goo job :)
ReplyDeleteI love the descriptive language you've used.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Juan!
ReplyDeleteYou made a great poem though there is a couple spelling mistakes in your writing other than that great poem!